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The graphs shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London

The graphs shows Underground Station passenger numbers in London
#graphs #station #passenger #numbers #london
the line graph
depict
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depicts
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the
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apply
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information about the number of travellers
which
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who
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 were seen
in
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at
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the
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apply
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underground stops in the
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UK
uk
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UK
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 over a different time period after analyzing the chart it is clearly seen that between 6am to 8
am
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am,
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 there was
sharp
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a sharp
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 upward
point
 attracting almost 400 hundred
passenger
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passengers
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 after which it
show
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 a
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declined
decline
declind
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decline
 trend hitting almost 200
passenger
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passengers
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 who
were
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was
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 using
a underground stations
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underground stations
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of
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in
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London
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london
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 despite having a short inclined direction from 11am to 14 pm that hitting almost 300 visitors
then
 it hit rock bottom reached its lowest
point
 at 16 am having nearly 100 travellers respectively
furthermore
, after hitting its similar hitting
point
 at the start it
then
 rose up suddenly reaching to
point
 of 400 customers who were using subway stations from 16 pm to 18 pm
subsequently
 it again
showing
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downward
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a downward
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 direction and remained the same for the next four hours of
londdon
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London
 station
overall
,
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London
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london
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the london
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subwaystation
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subway station
 saw a major fluctuation
between
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from
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 time to time
however
 peak
point
 and bottom
point
 have been seen in the given graph
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Vocabulary: Replace the words point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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