The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
The
graph
illustrates the
number
of occurrences and
injuries
per 100 million passenger miles
traveled
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travelled
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(PMT) per medium of transportation in 2002. The aforementioned illustration compares the
number
of
incidents
and
injuries
among 4 different means of transportation.
Overall
, at the onset, it is evident that the highest
number
of accidents
caused
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by
on demand
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on-demand
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respond
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vehicles whilst commuter rail happens to be bearing the lowest quantity in the
graph
.
According to
the
graph
, on demand-response vehicles were 225
incidents
and 173
injuries
, which were both
highest
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and three times as high as the second highest transport services –
buses
. Statistically, there were 76
incidents
and 66 people were injured
while
travelling on the
buses
. Moving on to
rails
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rail
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, it can be said from the
graph
that rail services were safer than two other means of
tranports
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transports
transport
.
Although
the
number
of
incidents
occurred
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that occurred
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on light
rails
was equal to that on
buses
, the
injuried
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injured
people were fewer than those
travelled
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who travelled
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by
buses
, at only 39. Travelers on heavy
rails
experienced fewer
such
events than those on light
rails
, but commuter
rails
were the vehicles that saw the fewest
number
of
incidents
and
injuries
in 2002, at only 20
incidents
and 17
injuries
.
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