The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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The
graph
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illustrates the
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of occurrences and
injuries
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per 100 million passenger miles
traveled
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(PMT) per medium of transportation in 2002. The aforementioned illustration compares the
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of
incidents
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and
injuries
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among 4 different means of transportation.
Overall
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, at the onset, it is evident that the highest
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of accidents
caused
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by
on demand
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respond
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vehicles whilst commuter rail happens to be bearing the lowest quantity in the
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.
According to
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the
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, on demand-response vehicles were 225
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and 173
injuries
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, which were both
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and three times as high as the second highest transport services –
buses
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. Statistically, there were 76
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and 66 people were injured
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travelling on the
buses
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. Moving on to
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rails
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rail
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, it can be said from the
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that rail services were safer than two other means of
tranports
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transports
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Although
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the
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of
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occurred
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on light
rails
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was equal to that on
buses
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, the
injuried
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injured
people were fewer than those
travelled
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who travelled
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by
buses
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, at only 39. Travelers on heavy
rails
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experienced fewer
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events than those on light
rails
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, but commuter
rails
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were the vehicles that saw the fewest
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of
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and
injuries
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in 2002, at only 20
incidents
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and 17
injuries
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.
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