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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents
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The chart illustrates the
number
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 of vehicles made by residents and non-residents entering the city centre during the past ten
years
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.
Overall
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, it can be
seem
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seen
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 from the chart that in the first four
years
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, the
number
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 of
cars
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 increased almost to the limit and began
decreased
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to decrease
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 moderately after the parking meters were introduced. Regarding trips by
non-residents
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non-residents,
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 the
number
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 increased only with the presence of parking meters.
Firstly
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, the average
number
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 of
cars
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 by residents reached more than 9,000 in
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years
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the years
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 1996, 1997, 1998,
1999
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and 1999
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.
Besides
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 that, when the parking meters were introduced, the
number
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 of
cars
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 reduced gradually to 5,000 and
has
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apply
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decreased slightly even more in 2004 with the
number
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 3,500.
In addition
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, the
number
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 of vehicles by non-residents
growth
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grew
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 rapidly from 5,000 in 1996 to more than 8,000 in 1999. And after that continued to maintain the
number
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 around 8000 in
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years
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the years
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 2000, 2001, 2002. In
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years
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the years
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 2003 when West
street
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Street
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 and Park Lane were closed to traffic, the
number
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 of
cars
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into
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in
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 the city centre dropped sharply to 3,000 in 2003
then
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 increased minimally more than 3,000 in 2004 and
last
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 in 2005 the
number
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 reached nearly 5,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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