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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
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The pie charts illustrate the information about spending aspects in four different categories housing, transport, food, heath care and other goods and
services
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 in Malaysia and Japan in 2010.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 people spend more cash on housing in Malaysia and less money on health care in both countries. In Japan, the expenditures in terms of food accounted for the most after other goods and
services
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 with 24%, followed by housing and transport by nearly 21% and 20%, respectively.
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, just 6% of families spent their salary on healthcare
services
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 in 2010 and 29% on other
services
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. As is shown from the charts, individuals spent 34 per cent of their whole fund on housing
services
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.
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, in respective with food and transport by 27% and 36%, in Malaysia. Meanwhile,
as well as
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 Japan, Malaysian households utilise a lower proportion of their funds on healthcare goods and
services
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.
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, approximately 10% on other facilities.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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