In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In some parts of the world, the number of residents moving from rural
areas
to the Use synonyms
cities
is increasing, thereby leaving the countryside becomes fewer inhabitants. Use synonyms
Such
a phenomenon can cause an appalling economic condition and cause the Linking Words
cities
to become more populated, leading to negative development.
Primarily, all citizens play a vital role in countries' economic growth, not only people in the Use synonyms
cities
, but Use synonyms
also
in the isolated Linking Words
areas
. Use synonyms
This
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due to
the fact that people in the countryside contribute from agricultural sectors. If individuals, like farmers, fishermen, and agricultural-related jobs, move to the Linking Words
cities
, the country will witness a shortage of staple foods which are cultivated and produced by those workers. Use synonyms
This
issue will exceptionally influence the economic cycle of certain countries because they will lose support from Linking Words
such
sectors as one of the largest economic contributors. Letting those who live in rural Linking Words
areas
move, Use synonyms
therefore
, may result in numerous shortcomings.
Another problem that possibly emerges if people continue to move to the capital is the prolonged congestion on the road because there will be an increase in the number of vehicles used. The notorious traffic in Jakarta, Linking Words
for instance
, might be the result of an overload population. Beyond Linking Words
this
malady, the more individuals live in a particular area, the harder they will seek jobs. Linking Words
Thus
, limited job opportunities can Linking Words
also
occur owing to never-ending competition in the labour market, increasing the unemployment rate.
In conclusion, the world trend of moving from suburban Linking Words
areas
to the capital will cause a problem in the economic sector and Use synonyms
also
contribute to traffic congestion which has been an alarming problem in the Linking Words
cities
. Use synonyms
Hence
, I believe that Linking Words
this
will lead to negative development.Linking Words
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