The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of the Canadian and Australian

population

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in terms of civil

status

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. It is noticeable that in Canada, there are six

status

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categories,

by contrast

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, Australia

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not have same-sex

marriage

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thus

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only five marital

status

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are shown in the chart.

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in both countries a larger portion of the

population

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is either separated or married, the percentage of other

status

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categories is relatively small. In Canada, more than half (53%) of the married

population

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are not living together but are not legally separated.

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the proportion of married people in Canada only

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29% of the total

population

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, the majority of Australians are bonded by

marriage

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46%. Separated individuals in Australia comprise 41% of the whole

population

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. The remaining 13% of Australian people are either single, widowed or legally separated.

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, the single and widowed Canadian citizens are proportional at 7%. A marginal portion of 3% in

this

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country are in homosexual

marriage

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. Australia,

on the other hand

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not have individuals involved in same-sex

marriage

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, status, marriage with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

174 words

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