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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of the Canadian and Australian
population
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 in terms of civil
status
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. It is noticeable that in Canada, there are six
status
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 categories,
by contrast
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, Australia
do
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 not have same-sex
marriage
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,
thus
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 only five marital
status
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 are shown in the chart.
While
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 in both countries a larger portion of the
population
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 is either separated or married, the percentage of other
status
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 categories is relatively small. In Canada, more than half (53%) of the married
population
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 are not living together but are not legally separated.
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 the proportion of married people in Canada only
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29% of the total
population
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, the majority of Australians are bonded by
marriage
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 46%. Separated individuals in Australia comprise 41% of the whole
population
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. The remaining 13% of Australian people are either single, widowed or legally separated.
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, the single and widowed Canadian citizens are proportional at 7%. A marginal portion of 3% in
this
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 country are in homosexual
marriage
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. Australia,
on the other hand
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,
do
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 not have individuals involved in same-sex
marriage
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, status, marriage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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