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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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A plethora of professionals think that juveniles should study new
tongue
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tongues
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 since elementary
school
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instead
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 of high
school
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.
This
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 essay agrees that the positive outcomes exceed the negative ones. The earlier a child
start
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 to make an effort in a certain area, the better it will become in the future. Children are interested in many things in life, including learning new and unfamiliar things. Primary
school
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 is the place where they begin their adventure of education and where unknown secrets start to
reveal
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 in front of them. Scientists from
the
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apply
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Oxford
university
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University
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 are saying that children between 5 and 12 years old are 95% more likely to understand a new
language
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 faster
that
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than
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 those above
this
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 age.
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, in
Bulgaria
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Bulgaria,
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 second
language
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 is included in 8th grade. Students in the same grade in the UK showed better results at international competitions, as they
have
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started
this
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 path of knowledge in the early educational years.
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, now they have the time and ability to upgrade their tuition. If a child is familiar with some kind of
language
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 at the age of 8,
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, by 14 it will be so developed in
this
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 matter, that it can include harder tasks in its daily life.
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, an early start in
the
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academic knowledge improves and develops
youngster's
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a youngster's
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 brain and way of thinking. Research
in
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at
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 Boston
university
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University
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 in 2020 showed that proficiency in unfamiliar speech can lead to
45
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a 45
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% improvement
of
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in
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 a kid's memory, which will result in better scores in other subjects. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 grade
school
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 is the best time for a new start and gaining knowledge in foreign
language
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, which a juvenile can upgrade in middle
school
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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