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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

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The actions of humankind have eliminated flora and fauna's habitat. In many societies, the number of them is dwindling. I strongly believe the main issues are the increase in logging and overusing of fossil fuel which contaminates their home. Having said that to address these problems nations can raise the recycling process and try to
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 other replacements.
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, they can
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 more environmentally friendly
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 like solar
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, the high rate of deforestation that happening
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 societies' needs.
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, in every country people need paper which is vital good for their daily
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as a result
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 they cut all trees in Amazon and destroy species'
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, All facilities need a source of
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 in order to work and the most common source is fossil fuel which exacerbates pollution.
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, numerous amount of plants and animals will die.
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, in order to tackle these problems there are convenient solutions. To clarify, if people used more recycling products like paper made from rubbish, they would mitigate the impact of deforestation and save a million of
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 of flora and fauna.
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, they can shift to more environmental
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 of
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 like solar
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 in order to run machines and factories. Not only do they can save the environment for our offspring but
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 they can have access to unlimited
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 of living.
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 in some communities the
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 of flora and fauna are in danger and their number dramatically falling
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 the deforestation and
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 of fossil fuels I firmly believe that we can address these issues by using recycled goods and alternative
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 of
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 for our factories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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