Mobile phones have made life easier: anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make work calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on the individual and society?
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played a big role in our life and Change the verb form
have
it
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they
makes
our life easier, whenever you want yan can use your Correct subject-verb agreement
make
phone
to make a call at any place , i believe that this
development has some advantages for expanding our communication as well as
exploring more about news or information however
, it has a bad impact on our natural talets in addition
,wasting our money .
refers to the beneficial
of the improvement technology like mobile Replace the word
benefits
phones
, the main pro is about our social life , because since is
appeared we can makeCorrect your spelling
it
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a
call
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calls
by
own Change preposition
on
phone
instead
of go to
somewhere to do that Remove the preposition
apply
like
we did Replace the word
as
it
in the past ,Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
we can answer or make our phone
remotely , on the other hands , because of phone
we can get more datas
about other countries Correct your spelling
data
in addition
what is going on out of our place ,for example
accourding
to some of Correct your spelling
according
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the researchs
researchs
that they emphasize on that Correct your spelling
research
phones
are one ofAdd an article
the
live
nowadays we are all connecting by our Replace the word
life
phones
.
despite this
, it has a
plenty of cons if we make exaggeration by using it for a long Remove the article
apply
times
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time
,
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apply
it
might Correct pronoun usage
we
be lose
our basic Change the verb form
be losing
talet
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talent
tablet
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, for instance,
for instance
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another issue
other issues
due to
we should pay for our calling , if i
give you an example ,in my Change the capitalization
I
country
we must pay around 50$ per month if you use or not .
in Add a comma
country,
counclusion
, Correct your spelling
conclusion
produceing
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producing
phones
is
one of theChange the verb form
are
noteciable
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noticeable
change
in wildlife,in Fix the agreement mistake
changes
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
sociaty
we are pleased in order to be one of the devices Correct your spelling
society
thet
help us to expand our conversationsCorrect your spelling
that
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and
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, therefore,
therefore
more aware about
new details Change preposition
of
,
since we Remove the comma
apply
suffered
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suffer
of
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from
disappeare
our talent Correct your spelling
disappeared
disappear
moreover
it is not good ecomonically
.Correct your spelling
economically
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