56.The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

56.The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graphic illustrates the way that
sugar
is produced from
sugar
cane.
Overall
, is a 7-step and linear process. The main material used is a
sugar
can and different machinery for transforming it into the final product,
sugar
. First of all, the
sugar
cane needs to be grown, and
this
process takes between 12 and 18 months, when they are mature,
then
is time for harvesting,
this
step can be done by specialised tractors which collect the
sugar
cane and put them in a large metal box, or by human labour, where individuals use tools for cutting the
sugar
canes. After the
sugar
canes are put into a machine which crushes the
sugar
canes, they are converted into
juice
.
The next step is
to place the
juice
in a limestone filter, so the
juice
is purified,
furthermore
, the
juice
should be set on an evaporator, so by heating it, the
juice
becomes syrup,
this
is followed by adding the syrup to a centrifuge, which separates
sugar
crystals from syrup, and only
sugar
cristal are needed, and they are placed in a big metal can, waiting for the
sugar
to dry and cool.
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  • mature
  • harvest
  • extract
  • purification
  • impurities
  • evaporation
  • thick syrup
  • crystallization
  • centrifugation
  • molasses
  • raw sugar crystals
  • refinement
  • purify
  • whiten
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