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The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now

The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now
The given map compares a
park
Use synonyms
 in 1980 with today.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
park
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 had two gates to get inside in 1980,
whereas
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 it has four gates now.
Additionally
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,
current
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the current
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 design of
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park
Correct article usage
the park
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 gives more
opporitunity
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opportunities
to
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for
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 individuals to spend their time in it,
such
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 as
playground
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a playground
the playground
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,
barbecue
Correct word choice
and barbecue
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 area. Turning to the southeast of the
park
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, the number of benches
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 risen from 3 to 4.
While
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bush
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the bush
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 has
replaced
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been replaced
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 with flowers, the location of the pond
did
Verb problem
has
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 not changed.
Moreover
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, there was a huge land for plants
at
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in
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 the southwest of the
park
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 in 1980, where a playground has been built in recent days. Another change is seen
at
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in
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 the northeast part of the
park
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.
However
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 trees
are
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apply
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still
existing
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exist
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 in that area,
chairs
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and chairs
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, desks and
barbecue
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a barbecue
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 have been added recently.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, roads have been constructed in the
park
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, which were not
seem
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seen
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in
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on
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 the map which
illustares
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illustrates
 the
park
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 in 1980.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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