Technology has made man more social or less social Discuss both views and give opinion
Technical advancement has brought a huge change in individuals' lives. Some are in
favor
that it changes Change the spelling
favour
people
's personalities in many aspects like many become introverts and the opposing group says that many gain confidence and become more practical and start socializing more. I am going to discuss both views in my essay. According to
me, people
have more chances to get involved. in business and many other activities due to
these advanced developments like computers, the Internet, etc.
To begin
with, some people
say that it brings positive development many are now doing trade while
sitting at their home. They can arrange meetings and have detailed discussions on their products while
sitting at their own pace without the hassle of taking flight and rushing towards airports and stations. For instance
, during the Covid period, there was a huge fall in many trading companies, and that affected their sales badly but due to
modern equipment they again stood back and started their business and reached a high level because, with the help of such
gadgets, they can do trading on an international level as well and also
do importing.
Moreover
, it saves the time
of many people
and many are using apps like Instagram, and Facebook which is
easily advertised on different platforms and get good feedback. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Hence
many get fame easily through these technologies and get to know many other people
. Lastly
, with the advent of AI efforts many are saved and they get more time
socializing and other tasks.
On the other hand
, some are against this
technology and say that it brings great distance between families. No one has time
to sit together and exchange their thoughts with their loved ones. Especially it affects the youth the most they become more shy and introverted and want to spend their whole time
sitting in their rooms. This
advancement also
has a detrimental effect on communication skills if someone has face-to-face meetings they do not feel comfortable and they seem more confused. They keep themself in a shell where they don't want to talk with others and try to spend the whole day chatting and playing games. For example
, in the coronavirus situation, children were not allowed to go to school hence
they take online classes they are unable to meet their friends hence
can affect their social life they are unable to learn how to work as a team.
In conclusion, it has both positive as well as
negative impacts but the downside can be controlled by implementing rules and regulations. Otherwise
, I think it brings good changes and great opportunities for people
to explore and socialize with others.Submitted by aimenmalik2021 on
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Task Response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states both views and the opinion. Make sure to provide a balanced discussion of both views in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on structuring the essay in a more coherent and cohesive manner. Ensure that the ideas are organized logically and that there is a stronger connection between different parts of the essay.
Lexical Resource
Work on expanding your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and effectively. Use a variety of vocabulary to convey meaning and avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range
Strive for more accurate and varied use of grammar structures, and pay attention to sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and verb tense consistency.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.