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International mariages, is it good or bad? Tell your opinion

International couples usually have as
much
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many
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 positive moments as struggling in their life.
To begin
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 with the benefits
on
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of
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 being an international couple, both partners have the opportunity
in settling
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to settle
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 down in two countries as they both have different residence permits.
Secondly
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, they are able to travel a lot and try different
cuisine
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cuisines
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. Another important fact is that mixed families’ children look universal and easily adaptable to any culture.
On the other hand
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, contrastive points of view and different
religion
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religions
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 sometimes can cause a lot of
several
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misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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.
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 diverse traditions can lead to arguments and cause a break between two lovers. Another important issue that can happen in international couples is
language
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the language
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 barrier. If none of the partners understood each other that would lead to various awkward situations and
struggle
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struggles
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 in understanding.
To conclude
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with
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, international marriages can
be seemed
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seem
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 unimaginable, but they are
also
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very
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unique.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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