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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate two phases in the development of Lynwich
College
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 with the second (the
college
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 as it currently is) showing a considerable expansion of
facilities
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, albeit with some loss of natural habitat, from that of 2006. It is immediately noticeable that the
college
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campus
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 has become more built up over the period, with the addition of a number of new
facilities
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.
This
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 has come at the expense of the, leafier environment that was present in 2006. It is
also
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 clear that students can now choose from an extended range of transport options in order to access the
college
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, with the car park being reduced to almost half of its 2006 size to allow for ample bike storage. The relocation of the
college
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’s library and the construction of two new buildings – a cafeteria and a sports centre, which
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 the old library – have greatly changed the layout of the
campus
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. The cafeteria now acts as the focal point connecting the academic
south-west
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southwest
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 corner with the athletic
south-east
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southeast
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 corner and the improved transport
facilities
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 in the
north-east
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northeast
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.
While
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 in 2006 the
college
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 seemed to have only made provision for students travelling to the
campus
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 by car, now,
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 the designated area for bicycles, a bus parking bay has been created on the north side of the property with a new path leading to the
campus
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.
Overall
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, we can see that a great deal of development and renovation has taken place at Lynwich
College
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, resulting in increased accessibility for students
as well as
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 improved sports and dining
facilities
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. It is interesting to note though that the
college
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’s educational
facilities
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 appear to have remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, facilities, campus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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