The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club.
The bar chart and the pie chart reported the monthly
usage
of health
club
by different genders in Miami and Florida in 2017, and the share of male and female membership in different ages. Fix the agreement mistake
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Overall
, men
used more health
club
than Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
women
throughout the entire year, and there were more younger male members compared to females.
Turning into details, there was a fluctuation in the number of men
and women
in the monthly usage
of health
club
, while
the usage
of men
has more changes than women
. The lowest usage
of health
club
in Fix the agreement mistake
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male
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males
is
February in 2017, which Wrong verb form
was
had
about 550 Verb problem
was
times
, then
it reached the
peak Correct article usage
a
to
nearly 900 Change preposition
of
times
in June, before falling back to 600 times
at the end
of the year. In terms of women
, the first 2 months in 2017 were the lowest in usage
, which had 500 times
in
each month, Change preposition
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while
the highest usage
was in August and September, which had over 700 times
each.
For the ages of the club
members, there were over half men
between 21 to 45, Change preposition
of men
while
women
only had
50% under Unnecessary verb
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this
age range. In comparison to men
, there were more women
members over 65, which was 6% more than men
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