Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, advertisements have become a common source for various brands

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their products. In

this

essay, I'll give my opinion and discuss the pros and cons of advertising.

Firstly

, advertisement of certain products helps us to know about different types available in the market.

People

often give their reviews

along with

advertising the products which

help

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helps

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us know in brief the difference between two brands selling the same thing.

For instance

, Amazon and Myntra have almost

same

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the same

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clothes available but

due to

the advertising and success of Amazon over the

years

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people

prefer to buy

thing

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things

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from

amazon

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Amazon

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rather than Myntra.

Secondly

due to

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

191 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
misleading
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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