The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million

The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million
The given figure presents information about
underground
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the underground
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railway
system in three
categorries
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categories
including the
number
of
passangers
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passengers
per year in
million
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millions
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that
London
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London's
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underground
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Underground
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railway
is the
eldest
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oldest
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and the longest route,
however
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however,
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the
number
of passengers per year in
Tokyo
is the highest.
To begin
with,
London
, Paris, and
Tokyo
are the three eldest
railway
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railways
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which
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were establiched
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establiched
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established
in 1863, 1900, and 1927, respectively,
while
the latest is from Los Angeles. The route in
London
place
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places
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the highest
number
also
with almost 400
kilometers
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kilometres
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. Meanwhile, the second place is in Paris (199) which
higher
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is higher
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than
Tokyo
(155) and Washington DC (126).
However
, the shortest
railway
is in Kyoto and Los Angeles, at 11 and 28 each.
On the other hand
, the
number
of people who use
underground
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the underground
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train in
Tokyo
is 1927 which
make
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makes
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it the highest. Following that, there is 1191
of
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apply
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Paris society travel with it,
whereas
London
only
775
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has 775
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passengers. There is a similar
number
of them in Kyoto and Los Angeles,
which accounted
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accounting
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for
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at
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for
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around 50.
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