91.In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the ocuntry side is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
It is argued that in many nations, an increasing
number
of individuals are moving from rural areas to cities
. This
essay will argue that this
is a completely negative development because this
will cause an increase in the number
of unemployed people
and also
it will reduce air
quality because of the increasing number
of transports.
This
development causes overpopulation in cities
. It will be more difficult to find a job because there is an increase in the number
of people
that are looking for work in the city centre. Since there is a limited number
of companies and work vacancies in the region, there are more people
unemployed and suffering from hunger and poverty. For example
, in the last
years, when Chinese people
decided to leave the countryside, they expected to have a better life in town, but when they got there, they couldn't find a job.
Transporting people
and products causes worse air
quality. Normally, factories and big companies are situated in the countryside or far away from the city centre, but, if people
decide to move to cities
, they have to travel longer distances to get to their job, and this
, increases air
pollution. This
is because vehicles emit carbon dioxide and use fuel, which both cause contamination and decrease the quality of the air
. For instance
, because of the large number
of vehicles that are on the roads every day in Pekin, it is very difficult to see a clear blue sky, since the air
is completely contaminated.
In conclusion, the decrease in population in the countryside and the growth in the number
of people
in cities
is a negative development because more people
are unemployed and it increases air
pollution.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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