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Information will soon be so easy to find on the internet that people will not need to remember anything. Do you agree?

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Nowadays all the
information
 we could ever need is available online and some people say that means the end of having to learn anything. It is true that these days everything you want to know is a few clicks away as long as you have
internet
 access.
However
, not everyone has working
internet
 all the time,
for example
 in certain buildings or remote locations, so we do need to be able to remember
information
.
Moreover
, it takes time to look up everything you need to know online,
whereas
 remembering something is immediate. The human memory is a much more efficient system. Another problem is the quality of the
information
 online. How do we know if it is accurate or reliable? We need to think about other facts we know and remember how to compare
information
 from different websites. Knowing (and remembering) how to find certain
information
 will be more important than knowing the
information
 itself.
Finally
, the
internet
 is a good tool but it is not a useful replacement for our brains. If we did not remember anything, we would all spend even more time on our phones and computers than we already do, which is not good for society. In conclusion, the
internet
 offers us many things but it is still important to use our knowledge and memories. We need our memories to function without the
internet
 and we
also
 need to know h
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