Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While
it is often thought that studying in
single-sex
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school
provide
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children
with the
chances
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to learn academic information, other
people
claim that
students
tend to be more social when they
study
in a different-sex
school
. In my opinion, I consider that studying in
co-education
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environment
provide
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students
with more benefits. On the one hand,
according to
some, same-sex
school
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tend to let
students
perform well in academics because they may be able to relax when
people
around them are the same gender.
That is
to say,
children
who are surrounded by the same sex would not feel the differences from others;
therefore
, they could have
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to show themselves.
For example
, some
people
may worry about the physical gap between
two
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genders when they have a PE lesson.
Thus
, student can enjoy a similar learning environment which push them to do better.
Furthermore
, it is maintained that
children
could pay more attention on
study
.
This
is because they would be attracted easily by different genders which would influence their studies and concentration.
On the other hand
, some may claim that mixed schools help to enhance the social skills of
students
, and I agree. One reason is that same-sex schools do not prepare
children
for the real world.
In other words
,
students
only have the opportunity to communicate with the same gender which would lead to the problem of feeling shy or
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to talk with different genders.
For instance
, the majority of girls who
study
in single-sex schools would only prefer to talk with females as they do not know how to socialize with boys.
As a result
,
children
would improve their abilities to communicate. Another reason why
people
have
such
a view is that boys and girls think differently. Each gender would have differing motions of thinking;
hence
, it can help
children
enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizons by absorbing various opinions.
To sum up
,
although
people
may vary in their opinions, I think that
students
could expand more knowledge and skills when they
study
in a co-education phenomenon. If both parents and
children
collectively agreed on a
school
,
children
would have a comfortable environment
and
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led
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them to perform well in their studies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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