You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is

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Dear Sir, I am writing in regard to enquire about the process to join your

gym

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. I have recently moved to

this

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neighbourhood at church street and your

Gym

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house is the nearest

gym

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in the locality.

Internet

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has some great reviews and

photo's

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photos

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about the

gym

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and I am totally impressed. So, I would like to know

few

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deatils

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details

about it.

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I would like to know what types of membership are available, and what are the rates for each. Is it going to be basic or

permium

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premium

type? I would be interested in the one which includes

shower

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a shower

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, spa and swimming facility.

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, do mention

current

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available activities. I read in

review

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the review

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about summer special yoga classes and I would like to join that activity.

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, I would like to know about the joining procedure and

required

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the required

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ID documents that I need for it. Please confirm if I can pay by cash or credit card. Hope to hear back from you. Yours Faithfully, Mayuri

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coherence cohesion

Consider adding more connectives and transitional phrases to further enhance the flow between ideas.

task achievement

Proofread your letter to correct typographical errors like 'deatils' and ensure clarity.

coherence cohesion

Clear and appropriate greeting and closing.

task achievement

The letter efficiently covers all required points: membership types, available activities, and joining procedure.

task achievement

Polite and suitable tone, maintaining a professional yet friendly approach.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

167 words

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