Trillions of dollars is spent on space exploration globally! Some people opine that it should be stopped and the money should be spent for the well-being of people. To what extent do you agree? (Do you agree or disagree?)

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Space has always been a mystery since time immemorial. There has been tremendous advancement in all spheres of life in the

world

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owing to the technological boom in general,

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exploration

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. Some

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are not in favour of exploring the cosmos as it needs a great deal of

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having a view of expending the amount for the prosperity of the

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in all respects. I partially agree

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several reasons. Exploring the cosmos has many advantages. The satellites orbiting the earth immensely help

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mankind in one way or the other. First and foremost, most natural calamities can now precisely be predicted

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evacuating

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from the danger zone.

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, a devastating storm called 'Okhi' hit

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coast a couple of years ago. Fortunately, it was accurately foreseen, and a massive disaster could be avoided. Thanks to the advanced technology!

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, there has been considerable advancement in communication because of spatial experiments

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sophisticated technology. Today,

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are able to keep in touch with their dear ones using communication gadgets with the help of the Internet.

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but not least, cartography-the practice of making maps-has been made much easier and more accurate.

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, international boundaries are clearly demarcated apart from spotting natural resources!

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, it goes without saying that astronomical experiments have always had several drawbacks too.

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, a lot of

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is spent on every mission but if they fail, the

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is lost.

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the international space station, a global initiative costs the

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a fortune. Trillions of amount

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pumped to keep it intact.

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, it is quite unfortunate that some astronauts have lost their lives

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several mishaps! To exemplify, 'Kalpana Chaula' an Indian astronaut was killed in a disaster

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her co-astronauts.

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, even poor nations try to compete with their rich counterparts in

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arena. A huge pile of electronic waste is being piled up globally apart from the associated radiation.

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of all, it is really exorbitant(very expensive) to make a full-fledged astronaut apparently! All these factors could put a country's economy at risk. By and large, astronomical experiments have always been indispensable for

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mankind.

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, the

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pumped into

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sphere must be used judiciously as there are millions of

people

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struggling to make

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ends meet all over the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Some scientists think that very soon computers will be more intelligent than humans. While some people think it is a positive development, others say it has adverse effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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