Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live Write an email to your friend. In your email 1)Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university 2)Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation 3)Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any address Begin your letter as follows Dear,

Kathy, I am writing a letter to suggest the availability of accommodations in my home country. When I selected the Bachelor's degree so I moved to Layyah and I used to live in a hostel at the University.
, I was living with a roommate and feeling difficulty with them.
, after completion I got a job in Lahore
I bought a flat for my permanent stay here. There are a lot of facilities here to stay in my city so you can choose easily. You can face difficulty living in a university hostel so I suggest you consider an apartment because the apartment has more space to live.
, the old apartment is being given on rent which is near to my house. The property owner is claiming low prices for tenants and it would be fine for you. If you consider
house I can talk to the landlord of his house for you.
, you can
contact him directly as I have his phone number 0800-22000. I advise you to please select the accommodation wisely because some people choose without any information and they feel problems during their stay accommodation. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Warm Wishes,
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task response
Please ensure that the content of your email directly addresses the task prompt, including the three specific points mentioned.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of the email could be improved to ensure that ideas are presented in a clear and organized manner. Additionally, consider using linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to include a wider variety of words and phrases related to the topic, such as accommodation, living arrangements, housing, etc.
grammatical range
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing present in the email. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tense consistency, and sentence structure to improve grammatical range.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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