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Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are people who believe that demolishing old
buildings
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 in order to construct new ones is better than spending money on restoration and maintaining old
buildings
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. I am of the opinion that society should save some of the old houses, so I partly disagree with the following statement. On the one hand, knocking down old constructions is bad for the look and
history
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 of the city. Most old
buildings
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 reflect
its
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history
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 of development,
for instance
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, a certain house or even street might have been designed by a particular architect who was living in the city during a certain era, and,
therefore
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, introduces different things which took place back
then
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.
Thus
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, demolishing a certain part of the historic block means destroying historical and cultural heritage, which leads to
irreversible
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the irreversible
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 loss of part of the
history
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.
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, a major consequence of
such
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 actions towards historical
buildings
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 is a city becoming less attractive for tourists, and,
therefore
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,
economy
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the economy
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 would have no profit. On the
flipside
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,
due to
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 a rapidly changing lifestyle, some old constructions may be no longer available for some new conveniences
such
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 as air conditioning, plumbing and so on and cannot be reconstructed for new purposes.
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, a lot of
buildings
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, especially those which were built in the 50s of the 20th century, have neither architectural, nor cultural value, and are considered outdated. So there is no reasonable reason to spend too much money to renovate them. In summary, it is worth spending money on only those
buildings
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 which have value in matters of architecture,
history
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 and culture. Personally, I stand for saving part of the old houses and establishing modern ones for living.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Preservation
  • Restoration
  • Demolition
  • Architectural heritage
  • Cultural significance
  • Tourist attraction
  • Urban landscape
  • Sustainability
  • Conservation
  • Economic benefits
  • Historical landmarks
  • Urban renewal
  • Infrastructure
  • Maintenance costs
  • Modern amenities
  • Building regulations
  • Community identity
  • Heritage conservation
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