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The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the result of surveys asking undergraduates and postgraduates why they chose Vaster university. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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net result of
students
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 who were
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undergrads
undergraduates
 or
postgrades
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post grades
postgrads
of
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 vaster
university
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 after analyzing the chart it is seen clearly that the
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university
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 reputation under
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postgrad
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students
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 is the highest and second highest at cost making up 42% and 36% respectively after that, the
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students
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availability
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availability
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accommodation
 is nearly 3%
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 that of personal recommendation for postgraduates is twice at roughly 7%
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, the percentile of location and other activity for
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 under
postgrades
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post grades
postgrads
 category is same having 6% each
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, for
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undergraduates
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undergradutes
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undergradutes,
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 the proportion of
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the reputation
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 of
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university
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the university
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 compared with
former
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 has relatively low at 30%
similarly
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 the sum of cost and personal recommendation
making
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 a total of 44% which is 1% less than postgraduates addition to that, there is a negligible difference between the location and
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availability
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availability
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accommodation
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accommodation
while
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 other sources remain
about
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 7% for
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undergrad
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undergraduate
students
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overall
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, it can vividly
manifested
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 that the result for postgraduates under
reputation
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the reputation
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 of
university
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 category
remain
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 the largest in ratio
while
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 that of personal recommendation is lower in
figure
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 as
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compared
comapred
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compared
 to undergraduate
students
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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