The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the average alternation in Cooper,
Nickel
, and
zinc
costs every month during 2014.
Overall
, the proportion of monthly valuation for
Nickel
saw a significant decrease.
Also
,
this
situation was true for Cooper, but the ultimate change is negligible.
However
, the prices for
zinc
increased after a month. The amount of changes in
Nickel
price in February was 6 per cent, which owned the highest shift. The similar figures for two other metals demonstrate 2% and 1% respectively at the beginning of the year. During the first month, the value of
Nickel
had dipped by June to -3%.
Additionally
, the same statistics for Cooper illustrated a dramatic fall till May and a stable situation until June.
Nevertheless
, the average monthly change in
pay
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of
zinc
soared till February by 2% and
then
reached the lowest degree twice; both in June and October to -1%. Whitin
further
time, all the materials experienced a positive movement in their prices.
Finally
in December, despite all fluctuations, the
Zinc
rate underwent a 1% alternation. It was -0.5% for Copper and -5% for
Nickle
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in contrast
to others was noticeable.
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