With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be oppened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?
Due to
the higher demands of fossil fuels, a certain segment of individuals argues
that we must explore the untouched destinations of the earth in search of energy sources. Though there is a number of supporters of Correct subject-verb agreement
argue
this
affirmation, I stand against this
and the following paragraphs of this
essay will analyze two factors which contribute to my opinion.
To begin
with, exploring virgin territories may outcome to
double the environmental pollution. Change preposition
in
As a result
of the complex mechanisms that we use to extract oil from the fossils, we have already created a number of problems in nature. For example
, a recent documentary programme which was telecasted on the Discovery Channel revealed about
an American oil pump resulting in to increase in the temperature in the sea waters, and now it has an effect melting down the glaciers at the North Change preposition
apply
pole
. Capitalize word
Pole
Hence
, if we use the existing technologies to explore untouched destinations, that will definitely outcome in polluting nature.
Secondly
, these invasions will destroy the unidentified creatures who live in these areas. For instance
, there was a report in the international media, about a hydropower plant, in Mexico that resulted in the destruction of a number of indigenous creatures who lived around that area. If it can happen in Mexico, there is no doubt that it will not happen in the alien soils. Therefore
, we must not consider exploring these grounds for sake
of our future generations.
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the sake
To conclude
, I reiterate that we must not destroy unexplored areas in searching
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search
for
fuel as it will result Change preposition
of
to
double the environmental pollution and the extinction of unknown animals. Change preposition
in
Instead
of doing these, we must put our efforts to find
more alternative eco-friendly energy sources to protect our mother nature.Change preposition
into finding
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