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In recent times, many people have been focused on bacteria associated with toilet visits and question whether sitting down when peeing is a good idea. To minimise the spread of bacteria, people shouldn't sit down on the toilet seat. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
fouced
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focus
 on the bacteria
on
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the
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public society. Some
people
arugement
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argue
 that when using public
toilet
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toilets
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 should not sit down on the
toilet
 set because of hygiene practices. I do agree with the statement,
some
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that some
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people
 do not clean after use and bacterial contamination
it
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build up each time
also
 there is
contain
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personal cleanliness. Bacteria grow fast
specially
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 in wet and dirty
environment
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. Most
batcterias
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bacteria
bacterias
batteries
 like to live in
warm
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 moist and messy
environment
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environments
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,
that
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which
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 makes them grow
quick
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,
also
 flies will carry
viurs
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virus
 and
separeted
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separated
 to
human
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humans
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 or animals.
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,
people
 after using
toilet
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the toilet
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 if there is a drop of pee on the
sit
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seat
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 without
wipe
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wiping
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 it off each time will help
bacterias
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bacteria
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 to
bulid
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build
 up
perfect
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the perfect
a perfect
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 place to live. Personal hygiene practices play a crucial role in reducing the risk of bacterial contamination in the bathroom. In that case, using public
toilet
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toilets
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consider
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is considered
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about
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apply
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personal cleanliness.
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,
this
 type of
people
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person
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 will always carry
disinfact
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disinfect
disinfects
 in their bag
although
 even calean they still have a problem
to sit
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sitting
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 down on the sit. In conclusion, bacteria is a big part
to consider
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of considering
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people
to sit
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sitting
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on
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in
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 the
share
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shared
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 bathroom and
for
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apply
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people
 who
are care
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care
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 about personal hygiene.
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