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Some people think that children should start to learn foreign language at a very early age .Do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed that
children
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 should begin to learn extra
language
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 when they are very young. I totally agree with
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 opinion
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 the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. My first reason is that a child can speak the mother’s
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 easily just by listening and repeating, without knowing any grammar. So
children
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 can learn another
language
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 in
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 way.
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, they may hear vowels that adults can not hear well. Research on
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 idea says
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 ability is available for
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 before the age of three and it is better for
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 to start hearing another
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 from birth.
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, when my son was two years old, he could say a few English words by listening to kids’ poems without direct instruction. My son
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 knew the colours and many names of animals by watching English cartoons. His pronunciation was especially perfect. If l explain the second reason, I should maintain that learning and training classes for adults are a bit difficult because they have a lot of work to do and focusing on learning a new
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 is hard for them.
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 not having the necessary attention makes the learning time long .It is so much boring.
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 reason, many folks leave learning.
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, when I was 25 years old ,I started to learn English by attending a
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 institute. Unfortunately, I did not go to the course after four months because I had a job. I was an inexperienced mother and I had to do the homework. As a
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, I did not have much time to practice and do my homework.
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 I left it half done. Of course, it does not mean that adults can not learn a new
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, but it will be more difficult and challenging than
children
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.
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, as discussed in the above paragraphs I totally agree with the idea that the public thinks it is better for guys to learn foreign languages when they are young, even in infancy.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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