Your city decides to put down an old building, but you disagree. Write a letter to the official. In your letter. -why you think it is a bad idea. -why it is important to keep it. -what benefits would it bring to the city.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
email to complain that the decision to put down the monument
in Xinghai Square
is not wise.
Firstly
, it is a wrong decision to put down the monument
since it makes Dalian
citizens disappointed. Most Dalian
citizens are proud of this
monument
as our city was the only one which was granted to build the smaller monument
in our square
besides
the one in Beijing Tian’an men
Capitalize word
Men
Square
.
Meanwhile, as we all know, this
monument
was built to commemorate the establishment of Dalian
City, and it also
attracts some tourists from our cities to visit Xinghai Square
as the monument
is a symbol of Dalian
. Therefore
, this
monument
should be kept. Additionally
, keeping this
monument
can continue to attract tourists to visit Dalian
, as a result
, it can bring financial income to Dalian
city and Dalian
people.
I hope that you can consider the voice of citizens seriously and stop the plan to put down the Correct article usage
the Dalian
monument
.
Yours faithfully.
SJSubmitted by shaojiedang on
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task response
Address the specific reasons why the decision to put down the monument is a bad idea and why it is important to keep it.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and show a suitable writing tone.
lexical resource
Good use of vocabulary, but could benefit from the use of more formal and varied language.
grammatical range
Some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to vary sentence structures and use a wider range of grammar.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.