Your city decides to put down an old building, but you disagree. Write a letter to the official. In your letter. -why you think it is a bad idea. -why it is important to keep it. -what benefits would it bring to the city.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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email to complain that the decision to put down the

monument

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in Xinghai

Square

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is not wise.

Firstly

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, it is a wrong decision to put down the

monument

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since it makes

Dalian

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citizens disappointed. Most

Dalian

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citizens are proud of

this

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monument

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as our city was the only one which was granted to build the smaller

monument

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in our

square

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besides

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the one in Beijing Tian’an

men

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Men

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Square

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. Meanwhile, as we all know,

this

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monument

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was built to commemorate the establishment of

Dalian

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City, and it

also

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attracts some tourists from our cities to visit Xinghai

Square

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as the

monument

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is a symbol of

Dalian

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Therefore

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this

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monument

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should be kept.

Additionally

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, keeping

this

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monument

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can continue to attract tourists to visit

Dalian

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as a result

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, it can bring financial income to

Dalian

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city and

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Dalian

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the Dalian

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people. I hope that you can consider the voice of citizens seriously and stop the plan to put down the

monument

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. Yours faithfully. SJ

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task response

Address the specific reasons why the decision to put down the monument is a bad idea and why it is important to keep it.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate and show a suitable writing tone.

lexical resource

Good use of vocabulary, but could benefit from the use of more formal and varied language.

grammatical range

Some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to vary sentence structures and use a wider range of grammar.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

168 words

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The Greeting

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