The pie charts show how many teenagers preferred reading, watching TV or using the internet in 3 different countries during leisure time in 2013.

The pie charts show how many teenagers preferred reading, watching TV or using the internet in 3 different countries during leisure time in 2013.
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The graphs of pizza above present how many adolescents from Australia, the United Kingdom and the United States, preferred reading, watching TV or using the Internet in their leisure time in 2003. To summarize, in that year, the Aussie teenagers spent more time on television as well the Americans,
whereas
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the British teenagers preferred reading. In Australia, reading was in second place, followed by the Internet. Already in the UK, the use of the World Wide Web was in the second position,
while
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watching TV achieved the third position in choice. In the USA, in second place was the use of the Internet and in the
last
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position was reading. The people between 13 and 19 years from the United Kingdom were those that had a higher percentage of readers (50%),
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the teenagers from the United States got the far classification, with only 15%. The percentage of adolescents that preferred to see TV in the U.S. and in the
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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