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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

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Social
Media
 is a tool
that is
 becoming quite popular these days because of its user-friendly features. It helps every individual to share their views and vent their frustrations publicly. But like a coin, these social networking sites
also
 have two sides.
While
 there are advantages, there are many drawbacks because of
this
.
To begin
 with, one can express their issues caused by someone or something here and increase awareness in society by using
such
 social networking platforms. It helps to expose the wrongdoings of some person or a
company
 so that the officials can take serious action as soon as possible.
For instance
, I came across a blog on a famous social
media
 application regarding how a
company
 scammed
people
 into purchasing stocks from their
company
. A good fellow citizen, who was conned by the
company
 shared it on social
media
. Now many are aware of the bogus
company
 and steered clear of it. The officials responded to the person and took necessary actions against the
company
.
Therefore
, it is quite advantageous in
such
 cases and
people
 are becoming more attuned to these situations.
On the other hand
,
although
 it is highly beneficial to share one's views on social
media
, it can lead to many complications
such
 as cyberbullying, stalking, and harassment which is leading to depression in all generations. Fake news is being circulated all over the internet and
people
 are misinformed about a lot of things. Privacy is compromised and
people
 are feeling violated. Many children and adults have become victims of cyberbullying. Recently, I heard about a celebrity being harassed by anti-fans on social
media
 which led to a decline in her mental health.
This
 is increasing toxicity in
people
 and a hate-bred environment in society. Henceforth, everyone should be aware of these consequences. I believe that proper cyber monitoring and regulating news flow on the internet could help in taking down
such
 misfortunes. To recapitulate, though expressing frustration and views on social
media
 publicly has become a trend in
this
 generation, we must bear in mind that
this
 huge network must be used sensibly, balancing the needs for expressing gratification and community building.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that is directly related to the question, avoiding unnecessarily broad generalizations.
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Use a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing more appropriately to manage the logical sequencing of ideas.
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Aim to address all parts of the task more completely, including a balanced discussion of the consequences and benefits of the trend.
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Provide more concrete and diverse examples to support the points made. While the examples given are useful, additional specificity will enhance the response's effectiveness.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accountability
  • Public venting
  • Reputation management
  • Social media platform
  • Complaining culture
  • Community solidarity
  • Conflict resolution
  • Entitlement
  • Direct communication
  • Customer service
  • Exposure
  • Misinformation
  • Amplification
  • Systemic issues
  • Constructive feedback
  • Online atmosphere
  • Negative content
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