Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding, while others think a small wedding is a better option. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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people
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that Change the verb form
think
wedding
is Correct article usage
a wedding
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a
time
moment, some Correct your spelling
one-time
people
agree to held
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hold
large
and expensive wedding Correct article usage
a large
while
others thinks
it is better to have Change the verb form
think
simple
ceremony. I will discuss both views and give my own perspective.
On the one hand, some Add an article
a simple
people
want to make their wedding become Correct article usage
an unforgetable
unforgetable
moment with Correct your spelling
unforgettable
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a numbers
numbers
of invitations and Fix the agreement mistake
number
spectular
attractions. Family Correct your spelling
spectacular
traditions
can be referred for
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to as
this
phenomenon as in some cultures it is a symbol of happines
and Correct your spelling
happiness
feeling
of Correct article usage
a feeling
grateful
to Replace the word
gratitude
the
God. Correct article usage
apply
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requires
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apply
the
new couples to Correct article usage
apply
held
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hold
big
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a big
party
for seven nights. In their culture, it Fix the agreement mistake
parties
is shows
the economic status in their community because of the Change the verb form
shows
mount
of Correct your spelling
amount
money
spent for that occasions
. Fix the agreement mistake
occasion
This
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These
traditions
sometimes make people
delay the decision to married as they need to prepare for the wedding cost.
On the other hand
, others thinks
that saving Change the verb form
think
the
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apply
money
for future needs it
is more important than Correct pronoun usage
apply
spent
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spending
the
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apply
money
at
one night. Young couples with low economic income are considering more on their life after marriage. Change preposition
in
This
is now become
a trend in young generations for celebrating their wedding moment only in Change to the active voice
now becomes
has now become
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office, Correct article usage
the Religion
place
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a place
the place
documented
. Add a missing verb
is documented
For instance
, several months ago I saw trend
in Social media when Add an article
a trend
the trend
people
post a picture of their simple wedding and give testimonials of their life. Most of them are happy with their decision and highlighted that they can save more money
for another needs
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another need
other needs
such
as house rental and insurance.
In conclusions
, Fix the agreement mistake
conclusion
while
some people
required
to Add a missing verb
are required
spent
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spend
money
on expensive and large wedding
because of Fix the agreement mistake
weddings
traditions
, others have decide
to save the Change the verb form
decided
money
for the household budget after married
. Replace the word
marriage
However
, I believe preserving traditions
is a must but couples should also
consider their economic level before deciding the scale of the wedding. In my opinion, it is better to save some money
for the future with a simple wedding ceremony.Submitted by ryanrush16 on
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