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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The given graph depicts the percentage of commuters using four means of
transportation
 in a city in Europe in the years
of
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1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, over the years, employees
traveled
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travelled
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 to and from work by
train
 and car more than by
the
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tube
 and
bus
. In 1960,
bus
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the bus
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 was the most popular mode of
transportation
 with nearly 40% of commuters
used
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 it to go to work, followed by the
tube
 at 27% and
train
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the train
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 at almost 20%. Only 7% of the
communters
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commuters
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computers
 used
car
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a car
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in
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this
 year. After 20 years, the percentage of people who
traveled
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 by
bus
 and
the
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tube
 dropped significantly to 27% and 22% respectively.
In contrast
,
an
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 dramatic surge was witnessed in the percentage of trains with 10%, which
at
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was at
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 the same level
with
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as
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bus
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buses
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, and cars
with
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at
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 16%, at the same level
with
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as
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 the underground
train
. In 2000, the number of employees who used
bus
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the bus
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 continued to decrease to 15%, making it the least used mode of
transportation
. The same can be
observered
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observed
 with
train
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trains
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 when
this
transportation
 dropped to 22%.
On the other hand
, the number of people who drove
car
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a car
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 soared to nearly 40%
while
 the
tube
 had a slight growth back to 25%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, train, tube, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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