today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. what problems does this cause? what can be done about this?
Nowadays, ways that can be done to that
people
have a big problem
with the person
who lives
in large cities
, that is
bad relationships with any people
living around them. Any person
who lives
in an apartment building but does not know and always stays at home
,
does not hand out to find neighbours. a big Remove the comma
apply
problem
is happening in large cities
but
do not have a way to cope. The writer will give some ofCorrect word choice
that
Add an article
the
problem
. In large cities
, the person
of all age will think like staying at home
because when they hang out, must be careful with the car and some the
bad cases so they will stay at Correct article usage
apply
home
all day to be safe , but that problem
happen
more at 10 years old or under 25 years old. There are many reasons, but now the main reason may be smartphones which children or students at university, secondary or primary Change the verb form
happens
must have
, There are many ways to have it but at age funny things like games, videos, taking a photo or chatting with friends and do not hang out. Any that think they will stay at Add a hyphen
must-have
home
and never go out and if they do out, they must have smartphones. According to
the knowledge of scientists in America, over the world, have90% person
has and use smartphones in their life
. Want decrease that case all families in large Fix the agreement mistake
lives
cities
must give for child to study about have neighbors live around them. For example
, a book was written by a person
lives
in Germany, he writes about a boy who does not have one neighbor because Correct pronoun usage
who lives
all day
he stays at Rephrase
apply
home
and thinks like
he Correct word choice
that
scare
Change the verb form
scares
people
around him because he ever talks with them. At last
, he died but never had one neighbour besides
. In conclusion, because society will ride and it does not stop, according to
that will have dunny thing will bear so people
will be attracted with it but must know point stop and give up their life. Instead
, will make more neighbours not think disadvantages in their lives
Submitted by [email protected] on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite