today, many people do not know do not their neighbours on large cities. what problems does this cause what can be done about this?
Nowadays,
people
have a big problem
with person
who lives in large Add an article
the person
a person
cities
, that is
bad relationships with any people
living around them. Any person
lives
in an apartment building but does not know and always Correct pronoun usage
who lives
stay
at Correct subject-verb agreement
stays
home
, do
not hand out to find neighbours. a big Correct subject-verb agreement
does
problem
is happening in large cities
but do not have wat
to cope. Fix the agreement mistake
a way
In the
writer will give some of Change preposition
The
way
Fix the agreement mistake
ways
can
be done Correct pronoun usage
that can
that
Change preposition
to that
problem
.
In large cities
, person
Add an article
the person
a person
at
all age will Change preposition
of
age will
have thinking like Remove the redundancy
apply
stay
at Wrong verb form
staying
home
because when they hang out, must careful
with Add a missing verb
be careful
car
and some Correct article usage
the car
of
Change preposition
apply
bad
cases so they will stay at Add an article
the bad
home
all day to safe
, but that Add a missing verb
be safe
problem
each
happen more at 10 years old or under 25 years old. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Have
many reasons, but now the main reason may be smartphones which Verb problem
There are
child
or students at university, secondary or primary must have, Fix the agreement mistake
children
have
Wrong verb form
There are
may
ways to have it but Correct your spelling
many
in
at age funny things like games, videos, Change preposition
apply
take
a photo or chatting with Wrong verb form
taking
friend
and do not hang out. Fix the agreement mistake
friends
With any
that Change preposition
Any
Add a comma
thinking,
thinking
they will stay at Replace the word
think
home
and never go out and if they do out, they must have smartphones.
According to
knowledge
of Add an article
the knowledge
a knowledge
scientist
in America, over the Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
world
have90% Add a comma
world,
person
have
and use Change the verb form
has
Add an article
a smartphone
the smartphone
smartphone
in their life. Want decrease that case all families in large Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
cities
must give for child to study about have neighbors live around them. For example
, have
a book was written by Unnecessary verb
apply
person
Correct article usage
a person
Correct pronoun usage
who live
live
in Germany, he writes about Correct subject-verb agreement
lives
one
boy Correct determiner usage
a
do
not have one neighbor because all day he stays at Wrong verb form
who does
home
and thinks like he scare people
live
around him because he ever Verb problem
apply
talk
with them. At Change the verb form
talks
last
, he died but never have
one neighbour Wrong verb form
had
besides
.
In conclusion, because social
will ride and it Replace the word
society
do
not stop, Change the verb form
does
according to
that will have dunny thing will born
so Change the verb form
bear
be born
people
will be attracted with it but must know point stop and give up their life. Instead
of
, will make more neighbours Change preposition
apply
to do
not think disadvantages in their Verb problem
apply
life
.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
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