Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on the Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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space anniversary,
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many individuals disagree that live quality around the global should be spent more money for in order to improve. I completely agree with
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poor people who have to live in bad
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and
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global warming is becoming more and more serious.
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quality of poor people
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in bad
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to
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research, so the
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of
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live
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in many
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in
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Earth
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the poor
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weren't
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by
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the government. So that the
condition
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slums in Mexico, the government didn't care about the
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higher and higher by day. On the
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too much money on research space
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global warming more serious.
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, the
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the temperature so it
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more disastrous because of the effect of global warming.
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a big effect on
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of individuals throughout the
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life
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span
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shorter. In conclusion,
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lots of dollars on research space have many bad
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on human
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Earth
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condition
and global warming.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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