The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates information about the average monthly
change
in the prices of
copper
,
nickel
, and zinc in 2014.
Overall
, the
copper
and
nickel
showed a significant downward trend during the
period
.
However
, zinc
initially
represented a lower
change
among the 3 of them, yet,
at the end
of the
period
it outraced
copper
and
nickel
in the percentage of average monthly changes.
Also
, both 3 of them have fluctuations over the year In January, the price
change
rates of
copper
and
nickel
were nearly 2% and 6% respectively,
Nickel
's rate represented a decrease between January and February of about 5%.
Also
, it remained steady from March to April, and experienced a gradual decrease for right next 1 month.
In addition
, throughout the end of the
period
1% in October, and
nickel
's percentage
change
rose to of the year.
Furthermore
, at the continued steadily to the rest beginning of the year,
Copper
experienced a downward trend. lour point, yet, throughout Between May and June it hitting a 1% and remained steady for about the July it rose to right next 2 months.
Lastly
,
at the end
of the
period
it represented a growth. In early January, Zinc rose significantly.
However
, it shows a gradual decrease in about 4 months and remained constant from July to August, in the same way as
copper
and
nickel
.
Moreover
, it increased about 1,5% from November to December and outraced
copper
and
nickel
in the
last
month
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