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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates information about the average monthly
change
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 in the prices of
copper
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,
nickel
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, and zinc in 2014.
Overall
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, the
copper
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 and
nickel
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 showed a significant downward trend during the
period
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.
However
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, zinc
initially
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 represented a lower
change
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 among the 3 of them, yet,
at the end
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 of the
period
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 it outraced
copper
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 and
nickel
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 in the percentage of average monthly changes.
Also
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, both 3 of them have fluctuations over the year In January, the price
change
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 rates of
copper
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 and
nickel
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 were nearly 2% and 6% respectively,
Nickel
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's rate represented a decrease between January and February of about 5%.
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, it remained steady from March to April, and experienced a gradual decrease for right next 1 month.
In addition
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, throughout the end of the
period
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 1% in October, and
nickel
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's percentage
change
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 rose to of the year.
Furthermore
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, at the continued steadily to the rest beginning of the year,
Copper
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 experienced a downward trend. lour point, yet, throughout Between May and June it hitting a 1% and remained steady for about the July it rose to right next 2 months.
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,
at the end
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 of the
period
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 it represented a growth. In early January, Zinc rose significantly.
However
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, it shows a gradual decrease in about 4 months and remained constant from July to August, in the same way as
copper
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 and
nickel
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.
Moreover
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, it increased about 1,5% from November to December and outraced
copper
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 and
nickel
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 in the
last
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 month
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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