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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words
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The maps depict the developments which took place in the educational institute between 1985 and 2012.
Overall
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, a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from an undeveloped
school
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 to a developed
school
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 . In the year 1985, the
school
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 was a less
crowdy
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crowded
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 area with 1500 students and
two
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a
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storeys
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two-storey
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class room
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classroom
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 block, but during the next 27 years, the
school
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 saw a number of changes. The most noticeable is that all of the classroom numbers increased,
the
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and the
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 library is being demolished to make a computer room for resources.
Moreover
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, a new
fitness
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 zone with
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool and
fitness
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 club sprang up around the playing field.
In contrast
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, only the office and the playing ground
remains
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remain
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 unchanged. The small
cark
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car
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 parking was cleared and converted into an artificial forest, server room and
fitness
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 area.
Further
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 developments were
construction
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the construction
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 of a circular parking for cars next to the
human made
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human-made
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 forest.
In addition
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, a
fitness
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 gym and a swimming pool
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also
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were also
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 constructed at the corner side of the playing field.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, fitness with synonyms.
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