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The table below presents the projected costing over the next five years in US dollars for three environmental projects for forestry. The pie chart demonstrates the projected

The table below presents the projected costing over the next five years in US dollars for three environmental projects for forestry. The pie chart demonstrates the projected
The table below presents the projected
costing
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costs
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 over the next five years in US dollars for three environmental projects for forestry. The pie chart demonstrates the projected expenditure in the first
year
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 as the projects are set up.
It is clear that
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 "West Africa" and "
South-est
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 Asia" increased in five years
comparing
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compared
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 with "Central Asia",
while
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 in projected expenditure in 1st
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year
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 the salaries were the most popular. As can be seen from the table,
the
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apply
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South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia's 1st and 5th
year
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's projected
costing
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 has
went
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 up from thirty
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million
milloin
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million
 to fifty million, but it is
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noticeable
noticable
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noticeable
, that in
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year
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years
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 1 and in
year
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 2 the
costing
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 had dropped
for
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 ten million,
while
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 West Africa and Central America decreased.
According to
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 the pie chart, exactly
a
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half of
projected
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the projected
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expenditure
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expenditures
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 in
year
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 1 were set-up costs,
meanwhile
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 there were office expenses and training expenditures which gas a small minority.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the eighth paragraph.
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