The provided maps illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital transformed in three periods of time.

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Overall

, the diagrams show how

area

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has changed from

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average town to a more medicine-oriented small city. By 1960, the place had had shopping

centre

and farmland alongside the main road. But during the next 20 years, they have been replaced with a cancer

centre

and nursing school. In

1980s

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the 1980s

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half of a previous building that

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belonged to a shopping

centre

was knocked down.

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, the hospital has gotten bigger and had a pharmacy part in it. It is noticeable that in the 2000s almost everything has changed. The cancer

centre

and the preceding building of

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the nursing

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school were adjoined.

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left side of the car park was transformed into a nursing school.

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, there

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no changes

happened

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to the

under

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right side of the main road during the

last

20 years.

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