The provided maps illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital transformed in three periods of time.

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Overall

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, the diagrams show how

area

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the area

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has changed from

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average town to a more medicine-oriented small city. By 1960, the place had had shopping

centre

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and farmland alongside the main road. But during the next 20 years, they have been replaced with a cancer

centre

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and nursing school. In

1980s

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the 1980s

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Correct article usage

apply

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half of a previous building that

was

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apply

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belonged to a shopping

centre

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was knocked down.

Moreover

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, the hospital has gotten bigger and had a pharmacy part in it. It is noticeable that in the 2000s almost everything has changed. The cancer

centre

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and the preceding building of

nursing

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the nursing

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school were adjoined.

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The

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left side of the car park was transformed into a nursing school.

However

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, there

are

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have been

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no changes

happened

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happening

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to the

under

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apply

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apply

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right side of the main road during the

last

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20 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provided" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

151 words

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The provided maps illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital transformed in three periods of time.

Nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is this the case? What can we do to encourage people to use bicycles more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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