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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The circle graph presents information about the primary causes of agricultural
land
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degredation globaly
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degradation globally
 in the 1990s,
while
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 the table presents the specific impacts of these causes on three regions North
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Oceania
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. Overview, the main reasons for
land
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degradation
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 were over-cultivation 35%, deforestation 30%, and overgrazing 28%, with other
factor
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 contributing to the left 7%. Regionally,
Europe
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 experienced the highest level of
land
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degradation
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 at 23%, primarily
due to
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 over-cultivation.
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, North
America
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 and
Oceania
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 reported lower rates of total
land
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degradation
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, at 13% and 5% respectively. Deforestation was the primary cause of
land
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degradation
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 in North
America
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 0.2% and
Europe
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 9.8%,
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 over-grazing had
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 impact in
Oceania
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 5.5%. The most striking feature was that over-cultivation had zero impact in
Oceania
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 as it was mostly affected by over-grazing.
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,
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overcultivation
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over-cultivation
over cultivation
, deforestation, and over-grazing were the leading causes of agricultural
land
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degradation
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 worldwide, their distribution varied notably across North
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Oceania
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 during the 1990s.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, america, europe, oceania, degradation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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