The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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casualty
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casualties
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and
injuries
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per 100
million
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passenger miles travelled by 5 types of travelling modes in 2002. The types of transport methods were commuter
rail
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, heavy
rail
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, light
rail
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, bus and demand response.
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, abrasions were lower than mishaps occurred and railway casualties were relatively lower in 2002.
To begin
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with, a total of 225
million
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PMT
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misfortune
accidents
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occurred
due to
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technology-based and shared mobility services
while
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recording the highest number of
accidents
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;
however
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,
injuries
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were 52
million
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PMT
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lower than the actual incidents that took place.
On the other hand
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,
accidents
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by commuter
rail
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(20
million
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PMT
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) were the lowest among all the other modes of travelling methods.
In addition
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, the commuter
rail
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accidents
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and
injuries
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ratio was higher compared to real
accidents
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,
therefore
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17
million
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PMT
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injuries
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USE SYNONYMS shocklosscrampcutbruiseburnwounddamagelacerationsoresufferingabusetraumafractureswellingscarsprain It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. turned out for 20
million
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PMT
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accidents
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.
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, Bus and light
rail
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accidents
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were relatively similar (76
million
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PMT
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) ;
however
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, the bus
injuries
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were higher compared to light
rail
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injuries
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words injuries, million, rail, pmt, accidents with synonyms.
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