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The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, 2023 and future projections for 2025.

The chart below gives information about Southland’s main exports in 2000, 2023 and future projections for 2025.
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The graph indicates data related to major sections of Southland’s export in 2000 and 2023, and forecast its future state in 2025.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the main part of the export is accounted for by international tourism;
while
 the
meat
products
has
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 the least quota. Considering 2000 and 2023, what stands out from the scheme is that all studied
part
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parts
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 have been improved except
meat
products
.
Also
, the greatest segment of exports, in 2023, belongs to dairy
products
 with 10
billions pound
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 within the period.
Conversely
,
meat
products
 have the lowest rank in the same year by roughly 11 million pound differences with the top rank.
On the other hand
, international visitors
had
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played the most dominant role in 2000.
While
diary
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dairy
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 and
meat
, 6 and with approximately 7
billions
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 respectively were in the next ranks. Looking forward, it can be seen that international backpackers reportedly will be the crucial aspect of exports.
Moreover
, it is
stimated
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stated
 that
meat
 production will be third to dairies.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, main exports, projections, trends, significant changes, increased, decreased, speculate, external factors, global demand, technological advancements, trade policies, agriculture, technology, manufacturing, economic implications, employment, GDP, economic growth, global economic trends
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