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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeen 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian feartures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares how many
visitors
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 travelled to a specific Caribbean
island
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 for touristic purposes in terms of the
number
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 of total
visitors
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 and their accommodation preferences (staying on
cruise
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shipS
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ships
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 or
the
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on the
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island
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) from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the general pattern was for the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 to dramatically increase in
this
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 time period. In 2010, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 on the
island
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 was 0.75
million
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.
In contrast
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, the rate of travelling and staying on a
cruise
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 was only 0.25
million
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visitors
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 in the same time period and the most popular visiting type to the
island
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 was
cruise
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visitors
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 in 2016 with 1.5
million
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 people,
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 the
visitors
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 staying
in
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on
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island
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 accommodations did not reach the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on a
cruise
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 ship and the rate was slightly lower at 1.25
million
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visitors
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 which took up the second alternative in the total amount of tourists in the same year. Out of a total of 3.5
million
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visitors
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, the majority consisted of
cruise
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 ship
visitors
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 with 2
million
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 in 2017. In comparison, the
number
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 of tourists staying on the
island
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 fluctuated and did not exceed the 1.5
million
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 barrier in the
seven years
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seven-year
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 period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, number, cruise, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Fluctuation
  • Shop closures
  • Retail openings
  • Economic conditions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Local economy
  • Business dynamics
  • Commercial landscape
  • Statistical comparison
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Consumer trends
  • Market forces
  • Business cycle
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