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The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period.

The graph below shows how much money a city council gave to book clubs over a four-year period.
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The graph gives information about the
amount
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 of
money
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 which a city council donates
for
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to
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book
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 clubs and
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
club
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members
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 over a period of 4
years
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. It shows the trends over a period of 4
years
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. By and large, there
was
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were
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 a lot of fluctuations between
money
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 donation and the
members
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 of
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book
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the book
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club
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.
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Amount
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The amount
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 of
money
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 a city gave to
book
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 clubs rose significantly in the first 2
years
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 and decreased in the next 2
years
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. In
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year
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years
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 1 and 2, the number of
members
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 in the
book
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club
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 fell but there was a dramatic increase in
year
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 3,4.
According to
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 the chart, from
first
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the first
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year
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 to
second
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the second
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year
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 slightly increased from 20,000$ to 22,500$.
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, in
third
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the third
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year
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, it ascended to 40,000, in
year
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 4 it fell to 35,000. In the first two
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year
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years
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,
while
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 increased, the number of
book
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club
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members
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 decreased steadily from 6000 to 5000.
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, there was a sharp increase in the next two
years
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, the number of
members
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 increased to 12,000 people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, book, club, members, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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