Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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of do secondary
students
should
study
one
subject
of international
news
in
school
I
will
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strongly agree with
this
thought. Yes, secondary
school
students
should
study
one
subject
as
internatonal
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international
news
as a
school
subject
. My opinion
for
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this
is enlisted below.
Firstly
, In today's technological era
school
students
have a lot of exposure to the internet, but very few of them use it wisely, Most of the
students
waste
their
time
watching videos and surfing on social media. In
short
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they
waste
ample
oftheir
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of their
time
on internet surfing. They do not bother to read something related to what is
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happening
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around them nor they are interested. International
news
as a mandatory
subject
in
school
can provide a good opportunity
to
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the
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students
to
study
and be aware of what is happening around the globe.
Secondly
, Many
students
find it boring to read
newspaper
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a newspaper
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or watch
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the
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news
on Television, Studying it as a
subject
will not only keep them updated
from
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the surroundings
also
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but also
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make it fun and fruitful
while
studying it with their fellow
students
.
On the other
hand
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many people
thinks
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think
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that it is a
waste
of
time
to
study
news
as a
subject
in
school
, I do not agree with
this
statement
hows
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can gathering information be a
waste
of
time
? Does it even
makes
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a
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sense?
Furthermore
, every
school
has
physical
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education period or a library period playing outside
classroom
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the classroom
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or reading general books
are
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not
waste
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a waste
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of
time
then
?
Moreover
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to
conlude
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conclude
I will say anything which gives us some knowledge can never be
entiled
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entitled
as a
waste
of
time
, schools
school
inculcate all types of
study
branches in their education system so that no student can left behind in any span of knowledge.
Students
should absorb knowledge
where ever
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they can, What can be more good, if they learn everything in
school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global perspectives
  • cultural understanding
  • interconnected world
  • critical thinking skills
  • discern biases
  • global citizenship
  • curriculum
  • academic development
  • sensitive content
  • news cycles
  • structured curriculum
  • positive developments
  • fostering hope
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