some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
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Improvement Suggestions
6Ensure that the essay has a clear introductory paragraph that paraphrases the prompt and presents a thesis statement, a body that develops ideas with examples, and a conclusion that summarises the main points and restates the thesis.
Develop each paragraph with one clear main idea, and use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas within and across paragraphs.
Support main points with specific examples and explanations to strengthen the argument. Avoid general statements and strive to provide concrete details.
Fully respond to all parts of the task ensuring that the position is relevant to the prompt. Include clear, relevant ideas, and ensure that opposing viewpoints are acknowledged and addressed.
Work on expressing ideas clearly and comprehensively, ensuring that each paragraph logically progresses from the previous one and contributes to the overall argument of the essay.
Use relevant, specific examples to illustrate your arguments, ensuring they are directly connected to the main points being discussed in the essay.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?