The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.

The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram illustrates the number of shops in the situation of close and open in one country from 2011 to 2018.
The line graph illustrates the amount of closings and
openings
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of shops during a
7 years
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period starting in 2011.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
openings
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experienced a
noticable
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noticeable
decrease
while
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this
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number
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witnessed a little decline after a large fluctuation. At the beginning, the
number
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of
closures
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was the highest
while
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it placed at the lowest
at the end
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. In 2011, over 8000 shops opened following which the numbers plummeted and reached 4000 in 2012
while
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the
closures
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experienced a regular decrease from 6500 and at that year stood at 6000. After 2012, both numbers rose sharply and reached the same point at 6500
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, after that both plummeted and the rate of
closures
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and
openings
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reached 1000 and 4000 respectively. After 2015, a large surge for
closuring
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closing
the shops was started and it stood at 5200 in 2016 when the rate of opening was not changed and remained steady at the same time. since 2016, the
number
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of
closures
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decreased gradually.
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, the
amount
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of
openings
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witnessed an increase and they reached 4100 and 5000 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words openings, number, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plummeted" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • illustrates
  • number of shops
  • situation
  • close
  • open
  • country
  • 2011
  • 2018
  • overview
  • year-wise
  • comparison
  • trend analysis
  • increase
  • decrease
  • reasons
  • future prediction
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