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the graph depicts four countries and population of their cities.

the graph depicts four countries and population of their cities.
#four #countries #population #cities
The line graph represents four Asia countries and their proportion of city residents in
percentage
 between 1970 and 2020, followed by
forecast
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 for
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two
 decades.
Overall
, there
two
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are two
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 pairs, which witnessed the same pattern throughout the period and are estimated to have
common
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a common
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 tendency for 2030 and 2040. By far the most significant changes were experienced by Malaysia and Indonesia as they started at nearly 15% and just above 30% respectively, making up a steady growth
in
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 1990 up to 2020. Both are predicted to have the heaviest figures compared to the rest pair during
next
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the next
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 decades, comprising almost 85% and 65% respectively.
Conversely
, the remaining
two
 countries
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as Philippines and Thailand showed
the
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 similar upward tendency over the period,
however
 more fluctuated and less
rapid
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, constituting much fewer
percentage
 points
as
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than
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 the previous
two
.
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Thailand
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Thailand's
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 population growth is more gradual, rather
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than the
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 population of
Philipines
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the Philipines
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, where there was a sudden jump from almost 32% to
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50% in 1990. Afterwards, there
is
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 a decline in
percentage
 up to 40 in 2010 for
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the Philippine’s
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Philippine’s
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Philippine
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 population, whilst the rest
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twofold the
percentage
 from nearly 15% to 30%. The latter
as well as
 the former have predictions to have a notable progression up to almost 65% and 45% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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