the graph depicts four countries and population of their cities.

the graph depicts four countries and population of their cities.
The line graph represents four Asia countries and their proportion of city residents in
percentage
between 1970 and 2020, followed by
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for
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two
decades.
Overall
, there
two
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are two
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pairs, which witnessed the same pattern throughout the period and are estimated to have
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tendency for 2030 and 2040. By far the most significant changes were experienced by Malaysia and Indonesia as they started at nearly 15% and just above 30% respectively, making up a steady growth
in
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1990 up to 2020. Both are predicted to have the heaviest figures compared to the rest pair during
next
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decades, comprising almost 85% and 65% respectively.
Conversely
, the remaining
two
countries
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as Philippines and Thailand showed
the
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similar upward tendency over the period,
however
more fluctuated and less
rapid
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, constituting much fewer
percentage
points
as
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the previous
two
.
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Thailand
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population growth is more gradual, rather
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population of
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, where there was a sudden jump from almost 32% to
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50% in 1990. Afterwards, there
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a decline in
percentage
up to 40 in 2010 for
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the Philippine’s
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Philippine’s
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Philippine
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population, whilst the rest
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twofold the
percentage
from nearly 15% to 30%. The latter
as well as
the former have predictions to have a notable progression up to almost 65% and 45% respectively.
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